The Night That Ended My Life
“Is she okay?”
“OMG what happened?!”
“Come on let's leave before the cops get here!”
“What should we do! Where should we go!”
“We’re all going to get in trouble!”
“This wasn't supposed to happen.”
7 hours earlier…
It was a nice and sunny Friday morning. I woke up when a breeze came through my window. I looked in the mirror and I knew it was going to be a great day, because there is a party tonight that I’ve been looking forward to for ages. I put my makeup on, did my hair, and changed into my school clothes, then walked downstairs. When I got downstairs my mom was making me and my brother breakfast.
“Good morning sweetie, how’d you sleep?” Asked my mom.
“Great!” I exclaimed. While I ate my breakfast I checked my phone and realized I had a message from my best friend, Brooke. I read the message that said, “I’m so excited for tonight! I’ll see you at school.” I instantly smiled and replied to her. Once I got done eating, I had to take my brother to school. I dropped him off and said goodbye and then went to my school. When I got out of my car, Brooke came up to me with my boyfriend, Christian.
“Hi babe,” Christian said. I smiled and told him how my night was and, then we started to walk to class, and before I knew it it was lunch time. We went to our normal table and talked about the party and who was all going to be there, everyone in our school was talking about it.
“I don’t know why you guys are so excited for this party, it is going to be like every other party,” Christian said.
“Babe you don’t get it. Brooke and I have something planned for tonight. It'll be epic!” I said with a smile on my face.
“Whatever,” said Christian with a not so amused face.
After lunch I went to the second half of the day classes. Once school was over I went to Brooke’s house to get ready for the party. I redid my makeup, hair, and changed into different clothes. Time flew at Brooke's, and before I knew it it was time to leave.
I got to the party, which was at Rick’s house, and there was already a ton of people there. I went inside and talked to all of my friends, and meet up with Christian. Brooke and I were so ready for our scam that we had planned on Ana. Our plan is to show everyone a video we found of her and embarrass her. She always has done bad stuff to us and it’s time for payback.
I sat down on the couch in the living room and saw that she had just walked in so I got up and put in the DVD and pressed play. Everyone in the room turned and started to watch the video of her. Her face got so red, and suddenly tears sprang from her face. She ran outside by the pool and Brooke and I followed.
“Why did you do this to me?" asked Ana.
“You don’t get why we did this? We did it because you have always been the person to try to bring us down. You’re always around when bad things happen to us, and all the rumors you spread about us,” I stated. She started to come toward me so I pushed her down by the pool, and then all of the sudden I see blood. The blood was coming from her head. She hit her head on the ground, and she stopped moving.
“Ana?” I asked with confusion in my voice. She didn’t reply I went to turn her over and her eyes weren't open.
“Is she okay?”
“OMG what happened?!”
“Come on let's leave before the cops get here!”
“What should we do! Where should we go!”
“We’re all going to get in trouble!” Everyone started to rush to get out of the house.
“This wasn’t the plan, this wasn’t supposed to happen,” I said while I started to cry.
“Let’s go!” yelled Christian.
“I can't just leave her, I have to wait for the cops,” I said while tears ran down my face. I couldn't believe what had just happened, all we wanted to do was embarrass her not physically hurt her. I started to hear the cop car siren, and then I knew that that was the night that ruined my life.
3 years later
My life has changed completely. I had probation and got in a ton of trouble. Ana ended up in a coma for a month. While she was in a coma, I didn't know how serious it had gone. Before all this happened I didn't care about what happened to other people from my actions. Now I realize that anything and everything someone does affects another person someway, somehow.
What a valuable (and hard) lesson to learn! I'm so glad that the narrator stayed with Ana when everyone else wanted to leave. She did the right thing, even though it would have been easier to run. No one wins in these situations; I think many can relate to how both characters felt.
ReplyDeleteI feel like it could be a real life situation. Great lesson.
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ReplyDeleteI really like how the author emphasized how normal the main character's day was, it made the incident so much more jarring. What happened to Ana, the "scam" if you will, really could have happened. And it's very interesting to see that deep down the main character still cared and chose to stay by Ana. I liked this story a lot.
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ReplyDeleteI loved the narrator in this story. It can be hard to do the right thing especially in such a difficult situation, but she did it anyways even though she was pressured not to
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ReplyDeleteThis is why public pools have a "no pushing" sign. But it wasn't completely stupid of the protagonist to stay with the victim, which made this story good.
ReplyDeletei really like how the story started.
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