The Monster
"What was that?" Tom asked John.
There was loud crashing sounds coming from on top of the hill. They are about 3 miles from the truck according to the map John is reading. They are running low on resources and still thriving to kill this monster they have been chasing for two weeks now.
It is about 20 minutes from dark and they still don't have camp set up or a fire going. Tom still wanted to make it another mile before setting camp up. They were traveling as fast as they could with the resources that they had left. After they made it to where Tom wanted to camp they got the fire started and got the tent set up. They got what was left of their food on the fire and had a very little supper. Tom knew they only had one more day to kill this monster because tomorrow they are heading back to the truck.
As they were laying down, trying to get some rest, there was some loud sounds coming towards them at a fast pace. Tom got his gun and headed toward the sound leaving the flashlight behind. John
grabbed the flashlight and ran after him. Tom ran about 100 yards ahead of john and stopped to
listen for the sounds again. Before he knew it, the big monster brown bear he was hunting charged him and pinned him on the ground. Tom was screaming as the giant beast was biting and clawing him. John quickly ran toward him with his pistol drawn as he got to about 30 yards he shot the bear, which got him off tom but did not kill it. As the bear got up John shot it 3 more times putting it on the ground with a loud thud.
Then John quickly ran to tom and found that he was bleeding badly from his right arm and shoulder where the bear had been ripping him apart. He then took of his shirt and tied it around him trying to keep pressure and stop some of the bleeding at this point tom is unconscious but is still breathing. John picked tom up and what was important from the supplies and headed toward the truck, which according to the map is only a mile away. He ran as fast as he could with tom over his shoulder. As he was running through the timber he could see light the sun had come up beyond the trees. About 100 more yards and john came out of the timber nearly where they went in. He put tom in the truck and raced to the hospital which was 20 miles away.
As John came into town, he noticed tom wasn't breathing very good. He rushed him into the hospital where he went into the emergency room. John sat in the waiting room for 6 hours until he heard anything about tom. The doctor finally came out with blood all over his clothes.
The doctor said he was gonna make it but they had to cut off his arm since it was only being held on by skin anyway. Other than that he just has some cuts and bruises and will be okay. John left the hospital after talking to tom telling him that he has some places to go and that he will be back in a little while with some food. John left and went back to get the bear and some food for tom. He got the bear loaded and took it home to hang. John came back with tom's food and they talked for hours about what had happened.
Dang, the bear really got him. That would suck to lose your arm. Good story!
ReplyDeleteBear is interesting
ReplyDeleteIt was a good story, it had a lot of detail and it was wrapped up nicely.
ReplyDeleteWow that must have been a doozy to write very intense!!
ReplyDeleteI like the suspense and the bear
ReplyDeleteI like the hunting plot it was very suspenseful. Great story
ReplyDeleteI can't imagine taking on a bear! I could feel the suspense and was glad nobody (except the bear) died. 🐻
ReplyDeleteTaking on a bear couldn't be imagined! That would really suck
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ReplyDeleteGreat story! Being attacked by a bear would be scary
ReplyDeleteImpressive fight with the bear. Good story.
ReplyDeleteI can't believe John killed the bear by himself. That would be hard to do. Great story!
ReplyDeleteIt reminded me of a movie that I used to watch. Very good!
ReplyDeleteI was impressed with how good the climatic bear fight was. I really like how this story was written. It had bear-ly any mistakes. I'm so sorry I really like puns.
ReplyDeleteNice job this kinda freaked me out I always wanted to go hunting but not after this
ReplyDeleteGood story, scary with the bear
ReplyDeleteimpressive fight with the bear, but good story
ReplyDeleteWow losing your arm would be terrible.
ReplyDeleteSucks that he had to get his arm cut off, how is he going to clap now?
ReplyDeleteI liked how John gave his shirt to Tom to try and stop the bleeding.
ReplyDeleteToo bad his arm is gone.
ReplyDeleteNice story, I like how the guy lost his arm.
ReplyDeleteI liked all the detail you used, with how far everything was.
ReplyDeleteGood story, my favorite part was the bear ripping the guy's arm off
ReplyDeleteVery interesting and kept me in suspense! I couldn't imagine taking on a bear, or having to live the rest of my life with one arm, that'd be extremely difficult!
ReplyDeleteIts cool how both the hunters survived.
ReplyDeleteGreat details during the whole story.
ReplyDeleteIt was a good story I liked the details you put into this story
ReplyDeleteGreat conflict
ReplyDeleteScary to have to wrestle with the bear. Good story
ReplyDeletePretty crazy but good story.
ReplyDeleteIt was a good story
ReplyDeleteThe details were great love the conflict in it!
ReplyDeleteThe details and the bear made story great, loved it
ReplyDeleteI liked the suspense and the fight with the bear. It sucks that he lost his arm though.
ReplyDeleteI loved the bear
ReplyDeleteThis was a wild but good story
ReplyDeleteDoes he get a bionic arm now?
ReplyDeleteI liked the bear a lot
ReplyDeleteHonestly thought they were hunting an actual monster, not a bear...
ReplyDeleteGood story
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